I fall under the influence of the blues
beats and sounds
this silence and that elusive sharp note
I wait until you feel as I do
until you observe rhythms in the moon
until my hand is held by yours
We dance at a melancholic tune
full of jazz-richness
bursting tango-passion
with a slow bolero-beat
The lights are dimmed slowly
We are in a fantasy-looking forest
You lead my steps
I follow with little resistance
One more turn
We are back
Music StopS
You look into my eyes smile
Time StopS with the silence
Your right hand refuses to leave my waist
My body feels the warmth of your touch
Soft sounds reinitiate the clocks
You and I dance
fallen under the influence of music
I am smiling
I’m falling
You pulled me closer
You fell
We
Dance
under the influence
Ready to fall again
_____Adriana Citlali
XVI-X-MMXIV
Prompt > dVerse Poetics – Under the Influence of Music :
Today I wrote under the influence of Fallen by Presuntos Implicados & Randy Crawford:
Beautiful writing :-))
under the influence of music for sure…it can sweep you away into that dance…and then it seems the world is only just the two of you there…and …smiles…felt that a bit in your words…always falling…
music takes you to another place–instantly. This write captures that sweet feeling perfectly… smiles
smiles.. that is a beautiful fall you know… i would love to be able to dance tango – such a highly passionate and expressive dance… whew…
very sensual, you cast an intimate spell here
i like the part.. ‘we are in a fantasy looking forest’ as then the dance of poetry becomes dreamscape too.. and usually the imaginary lovers.. are we.. in desire.. our hearts to be.. in art..of dance… song.. and poetry lyrics that swing to the notes of life! and love..:)
To fall together with music like that is truly the best way.. I like the seductive way your words fall…
You imitate the syncopation and the rhythm so well in your poem…
Thank you. It was truly inspired by music. I guess the background music that I was playing while writing the poem got its imprint there.
So much of intimacy you build in here – loved it. Smiles. Enjoyed your take on the prompt…
This is one of the most beautiful poems that I have ever read.
Salud amiga!
Mark Butkus
Very kind words, Mark. ¡Gracias!