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When space is silence…

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On writing a poem

Posted on November 27, 2013 By adcitlali

You: How do you write a poem without knowing what to say?          

I start by attempting that impossible silence in my head    
while your question bounces with varying emphasis     
filling in that luxurious void so hard to come by    

The bounces start changing frequency    
sometimes they go into resonance    
sometimes they touch chaos    

Their fractals get confused and mutate into new words    
sounds under my hair that do not always make sense    

Then comes the conscious mind    
trying to understand the patterns in those sounds    
Out comes a verse stamped onto the white screen    
–white paper     occasionally    

A verse follows a verse
       asynchronously
like those bounces with a question mark
A stanza is formed        somehow  
followed by a second, third, sometimes a fourth one    
That silly conscious self comes back and deletes half of the words  

The tempo changes  
a short silence feels my spirit  

Some verses exchange places    
 some   get distorted  
others transmute into a butterfly or a frog   

An even shorter
                  silence 

Followed by dismissal of more words 

A thorough read 

More chaos 

Bliss: 

A poem has been written! 


_____Adriana Citlali
XXVII-XI-MMXIII


 

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Comments (19)

  1. brian miller says:
    November 27, 2013 at 4:08 pm

    ha. poems are def born out of chaos….emerging one finger at a time…sometimes in parts…growing up into stanzas…and birth is not a painless process either..ha

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    1. Adriana Citlali Ramírez says:
      November 27, 2013 at 4:20 pm

      I think the touch of chaos helps even more when our conscious mind does not have a clue of what to write about… 🙂

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  2. Björn Rudberg (brudberg) says:
    November 27, 2013 at 4:39 pm

    Love the reference to both chaos and fractals. 🙂

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    1. Adriana Citlali Ramírez says:
      November 27, 2013 at 5:14 pm

      Thanks for visiting my blog!

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  3. Mary says:
    November 27, 2013 at 5:47 pm

    What a wonderful poem about how a poem comes to be. You have really described the process in an intriguing way. I can identify with the idea of ‘bounces’ and also the move from the subconscious to the conscious mind, the changing in the order of verses, etc. It seems indeed like a chaotic process at first, but it IS bliss indeed when a poem finally is born. Well described!

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    1. Adriana Citlali Ramírez says:
      November 27, 2013 at 9:12 pm

      Thank you, Mary. It pleases me to read that other poets can see part of their writing process reflected here.

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  4. Victoria C. Slotto says:
    November 27, 2013 at 6:16 pm

    You definitely nailed the process, Adriana. Start with silence and pass through chaos and eventually that bliss when you’ve arrived. Re: your comments on my blog–the photo doesn’t begin to fit what I saw. That’s why I’m kicking myself for not stopping to take a photo!

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    1. Adriana Citlali Ramírez says:
      November 27, 2013 at 9:15 pm

      Hi Victoria,
      Thanks for stopping by and for your kind feedback. Please do not take my comment too seriously. As a matter of fact, seeing the photo made me read your poem at least two more times. It was a good experience… 🙂

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  5. claudia says:
    November 27, 2013 at 7:32 pm

    haha… you capture it so well… it is a process isn’t it… a bit like giving birth…a bit like painting and overpainting…and re-thinking the colors and changing the colors… oy… those poets…smiles

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    1. Adriana Citlali Ramírez says:
      November 27, 2013 at 9:16 pm

      Yeah, those poets! 🙂

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  6. Gabriella says:
    November 27, 2013 at 7:51 pm

    I am sure lots of us can identify with your poem Adriana, some way or other. I am often amazed at how I come up with a poem when I thought nothing would come out of ‘the silence in my head’.

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    1. Adriana Citlali Ramírez says:
      November 27, 2013 at 9:18 pm

      Someone once told me that as humans we cannot really understand emptiness in the same way we cannot really understand the idea of infinity. Our silence (mine, at least) is usually very loud…

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  7. Poet Laundry says:
    November 27, 2013 at 10:27 pm

    Nicely done. There is the moment upon the completion of the process that is so gratifying…blissful! Great work 🙂

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  8. ManicDdaily says:
    November 28, 2013 at 12:46 am

    Very clever! Poems definitely find themselves. I find this actually even more true when writing in a form. Thanks. K.

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  9. ManicDdaily says:
    November 28, 2013 at 12:47 am

    PS–especially liked all the bounces here. k.

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  10. Arron Shilling says:
    November 28, 2013 at 4:03 am

    Hey Adriana

    you read my mind 🙂 I have read many attempts to articulate the process of art-making or poetic composition but in truth they usually fail to come close to the actual practice as I see, feel or experience it BUT my eye and mind where fixed throughout.

    Your writing is crisp and clear and effective, not to mention accurate: all of which is essential to convey the magic and the flare . . . and flair is there also – a real pleasure to read.

    the battle between conscious awareness and instinct , the plunge pool of dream and magic: you nail it

    thank you, best 🙂

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    1. Adriana Citlali Ramírez says:
      May 26, 2014 at 3:06 pm

      Hey Arron,
      Apologies for the late response…

      I truly appreciate your kind comments. As you mentioned, the creative writing process is not always easy to explain –even to another writer as we are all different. I believe that for this type of “difficulties” in communication, poetry helps. Poetry has the ability to charge with extra meaning each word and to create images that translate with a range of variations to different persons while keeping their main essence. Maybe that is why this poem works. I do not know!

      Thanks, again!
      Adriana

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  11. J Cosmo Newbery says:
    November 28, 2013 at 10:35 am

    Amazing how often the destination is not where you thought you were going.

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  12. poetrypea says:
    November 28, 2013 at 7:36 pm

    How interesting to hear how you create.

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