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Poetry blindness

Posted on November 14, 2016 By adcitlali

I come to a state of poetry blindness but I chose to write. I write about the challenge of crafting a haibun out of a true birthday story, or a big-looking moon, or both. I struggle and start strolling down a spiral that repeats itself, but not exactly. I write about it. I strive to write about my recent birthday flying west through an extended night, and the closest moon to the Earth since 1948. I wonder if the blindness is real or if it is a consequence of the struggle that keeps curving my path. I chose to write. Super Moon. Birthday. Both. Challenge. Choice. Moon. Day.

Dark November hours — thoughts
trapped in curves without closure
until brightness fills the sky


_____Adriana Citlali
XI-X-MMXVI

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Comments (19)

  1. Bodhirose says:
    November 15, 2016 at 12:12 am

    I’m glad you chose to write this in spite of your “poetry blindness,” Adriana. I feel your struggle here.

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  2. kanzensakura says:
    November 15, 2016 at 1:24 am

    I too feel your struggle in this. The haiku is truly lovely and says it all.

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  3. Arcadia Maria says:
    November 15, 2016 at 1:33 am

    I like this a lot. I found this prompt a bit awkward but I tried it anyway. 🙂

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    1. Adriana Citlali Ramírez says:
      November 15, 2016 at 8:12 pm

      Good to read that I wasn’t the only one struggling with the prompt. Ha! I’ll read your entry.

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  4. Grace says:
    November 15, 2016 at 2:03 am

    Inspiration comes from many things…we just need to be open to them ~ Thanks for joining us ~

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  5. Björn Rudberg (brudberg) says:
    November 15, 2016 at 5:38 am

    Finding inspiration is often found in the process of writing… see afterwards the moon guides your pen,

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    1. Adriana Citlali Ramírez says:
      November 15, 2016 at 8:11 pm

      Moonlight can heal even an inspiration struggle.

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  6. lynn__ says:
    November 15, 2016 at 2:18 pm

    Yes, we choose to write…beauty in haiku.

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  7. katiemiafrederick says:
    November 15, 2016 at 5:35 pm

    sMiLes my friend..
    remembering what
    my favorite psychotherapist
    said.. her name is Karen by
    the way.. when the moon light
    of my emotions dimmed to new
    moon of dark never close to quarter full..
    she said..
    the mind
    and body
    is always
    rewiring for change
    in both neuroplastic
    and epigenetic way
    according to struggle
    of steps or sitting
    standing
    still..
    then i wrote
    then i danced
    first i took the
    word
    and
    step..
    practice
    act
    produce
    create
    first step
    sparks make fire of life..
    in bRiGht moon eYes of
    iMagiNAtion.. moVinG Creativity sAMe..:)

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    1. Adriana Citlali Ramírez says:
      November 15, 2016 at 8:47 pm

      Thanks for sharing. Yesterday I wrote, in spite of the struggle, today I painted a bright big canvas, let’s see what happens tomorrow. 🙂

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      1. katiemiafrederick says:
        November 15, 2016 at 9:14 pm

        Great! Adri…
        yes keep the brush
        moving..:)

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  8. whippetwisdom says:
    November 15, 2016 at 9:26 pm

    I can feel this was not easy for you and yet you have created a wonderful haibun and haiku here with the moon’s energy shining through, well done :o)

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    1. Adriana Citlali Ramírez says:
      November 15, 2016 at 11:15 pm

      Oh! I’m glad it transmits the struggle and the light at the end.

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      1. whippetwisdom says:
        November 16, 2016 at 9:36 am

        ☺💜

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  9. Rosemary Nissen-Wade says:
    November 16, 2016 at 5:35 am

    And you end up writing something wonderful!

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    1. Adriana Citlali Ramírez says:
      November 16, 2016 at 8:21 am

      🙂

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  10. sarahsouthwest says:
    November 16, 2016 at 6:10 pm

    This works so well. I think everyone who writes will recognise that state of being! and then out of it comes that lovely haiku. ..

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  11. Mish says:
    November 18, 2016 at 8:41 pm

    I agree. This does work well. A different approach created something unique and special. Even our struggles to write give us something to write about. It’s a win win! 🙂

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  12. beccaswordbeat says:
    November 23, 2016 at 5:48 pm

    Very nice!!

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