Manipulative sadness
vivacious master of the grievance we wont damage
fake
casual echo
of a sassy duple in a resonant fugue
A night-spread lavishly disturbing us
Short sparks of vibrant violet light
single vision fighting a vacuous exchange
of psychedelic music
A sky slathered with sumptuous darkness
Oscillatory feelings
jazzy beats
stark dialogue
Gothic times approaching
nonstop
No!
_____Adriana Citlali
XV-IX-MMXIII
Manipulative sadness is a great start to this piece. Interesting combination of words. I also appreciate “lavishly disturbing…” Thanks for writing at The Sunday Whirl.
Thank you for the feedback, Brenda. Ah! And it is my pleasure to participate at The Sunday Whirl.
My favorite line is A sky slathered with sumptuous darkness. Yes!
Very nice, and I agree with Sabra–that’s my favorite line also!
Daphne and Sabra: Thank you! The word that I found more challenging to fit into the poem is sumptuous… Your feedback makes me happy.
along with the sky line I like the first two lines also.
sky slathered with scrumpious darkness…haha…love that and the whole V thing in the middle…made me thing of the monologue from V for Vendetta…
What some beautiful word combinations you have created here for us to savor and visualize.
This is a poem that “does” things to you rather than you absorbing it passively. Good poetry causes a reaction in the reader. This is excellent poetry. many thanks.
Greetings from London.